1. 适当用被动代替主动，这样能更客观的反映事实,句子开头不要总是用we / I (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. )举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段：It is, therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. Thus，its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.
第一段：I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that I indulged myself in googling an army of useful information I had expected, and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly替换very
thrilling替换exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb替换sb. be interested in sth.
google替换search
an army of替换a lot of
第二段：The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say that we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
The dawn of the new century witnessed是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情；
Increasing popularity替换more and more popular
Coincident with…非常地道的词汇，表达"与…一致"的意思，替换With…
Advancement替换development
Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替换enter into
Current ( currently )替换now
Appeal to sb.替换sb. be interested in sth.
Growing individuals替换more and more people
It is no exaggeration to say经典句型，说某事是毫不夸张的
第三段：To begin with, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment. Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
We can, freely, search用了插入语的写作手法
our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened.用了非常精彩的被动
Additionally替换In addition / Besides
Deliver替换send
第四段：There is no denying that, however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen, which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
